Vision: 4/5. I really like how you write! It's got a nice flow and it's easy to imagine while reading.
Originality: 3/5. I don't mean this as a bad rating, but interviews gone wrong like this are not the most unique ideas. However, I do like the whole bakery situation.
Technique: 4/5. I can't say it's the best piece I've ever read, but it's good! I think there were some parts that were slightly confusing, but I'm also exhausted and it's almost 1 am.
Impact: 4.5/5. Stories like this always leave an impact... It literally sends shivers up my spine. I think it's so creepy how there are so many people like this out there. *shiver*
Anyway, nicely done overall! I really enjoyed this piece (as strange as that sounds, given the topic )
I find it odd that Alden has so many women working there and yet he's attracted to younger boys, though.
But that may be one of my tired confusions...
Keep up the writing!
No, no, I'm perfectly fine with with the originality rating and your confusion. XD; As said in the description, it's based on another story I wrote a while back and may or may not be canon. This was just a "free-write", more or less, because my Creative Writing class was obsessed with those at one point. I'm glad that it left an impact, though .w. Thank you for reviewing!
You're welcome! I really wish I'd taken a creative writing class at some point... Oh well I enjoyed this piece! Thank you for posting
Oh, they're so fun and my classmates are really polite. My professor's stern but supportive, and she's a published author. XD I read a few pages of her work. ._. She's a dark, dark woman. Anyway! It's never too late to take a course and it's definitely worth it!