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Vision: 4/5. I really like how you write! It's got a nice flow and it's easy to imagine while reading.

Originality: 3/5. I don't mean this as a bad rating, but interviews gone wrong like this are not the most unique ideas. However, I do like the whole bakery situation.

Technique: 4/5. I can't say it's the best piece I've ever read, but it's good! I think there were some parts that were slightly confusing, but I'm also exhausted and it's almost 1 am.

Impact: 4.5/5. Stories like this always leave an impact... It literally sends shivers up my spine. I think it's so creepy how there are so many people like this out there. *shiver*

Anyway, nicely done overall! I really enjoyed this piece (as strange as that sounds, given the topic :P)
I find it odd that Alden has so many women working there and yet he's attracted to younger boys, though.
But that may be one of my tired confusions... :XD:

Keep up the writing! :D
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Ninvampirate2011 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
No, no, I'm perfectly fine with with the originality rating and your confusion. XD; As said in the description, it's based on another story I wrote a while back and may or may not be canon. This was just a "free-write", more or less, because my Creative Writing class was obsessed with those at one point. I'm glad that it left an impact, though .w. Thank you for reviewing!
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
You're welcome! I really wish I'd taken a creative writing class at some point... Oh well :shrug: I enjoyed this piece! Thank you for posting :)
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Ninvampirate2011 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
Oh, they're so fun and my classmates are really polite. My professor's stern but supportive, and she's a published author. XD I read a few pages of her work. ._. She's a dark, dark woman. Anyway! It's never too late to take a course and it's definitely worth it!
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
I'll defintely consider it. :D I'm focusing on finishing my degree first, though (which, sadly, is not a writing degree).
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Ninvampirate2011 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Oh, okay. ^^
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